cuteboy_vn
18-01-2004, 08:34
hi all, could you please check my 2 essays and show me spelling or gramatical mistakes. remember to never mind the writing style, because these are for history, not english.
History Essay #1
Canada was not the same country in 1919 that it had been in 1913. World War I was the war that changed Canada. This will be proved by examining the following categories: Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory, the role of women on the homefront, and contributions from the homefront other than women.
Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory made World War I change Canada. During World War I, Canadian soldiers noticeably contributed to the winning of many battles against the Germany, such as the battles of Ypres, and Vimy Ridge. They were also leading the Allies’ forces to throw back the German military in the Last Hundred Days. As well, the Canadian navy helped hunting German U-boats and escorting cargo ships, which brought supplies to Britain. Therefore, Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory made World War I change Canada.
The role of women in the homefront made World War I change Canada. During the wartime, many women had started working in many categories of jobs such as secretaries, salesperson, and assembly line workers. In addition, women were buying bonds from the government to finance the war. Many women’s organizations were established to sew socks and pajamas to send to the soldiers. As a result, the role of women in the homefront made World War I changes Canada.
The contributions other than women from the homefront made World War I change Canada. In World War I, Canadian farmers produced four times more food to help feeding the Canadian, British and French soldiers. Canadians also made guns, airplane parts, and ships to supply the war. During the war, about 12,000 boys between the age of 15 and 19 were enrolled and placed on farms to help do the chores and overcome the labour shortage. In addition, many clubs and organizations such as The Dorcas Club and The Thrift Stamp were established to gather money and other necessities to supply the war. Thus, the contributions other than women from the homefront made World War I change Canada.
In conclusion, World War I was the war that changed Canada. It has been proved by examining the above categories: Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory, the role of women on the homefront, and contributions other than women from the homefront.
History Essay #1
Canada was not the same country in 1919 that it had been in 1913. World War I was the war that changed Canada. This will be proved by examining the following categories: Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory, the role of women on the homefront, and contributions from the homefront other than women.
Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory made World War I change Canada. During World War I, Canadian soldiers noticeably contributed to the winning of many battles against the Germany, such as the battles of Ypres, and Vimy Ridge. They were also leading the Allies’ forces to throw back the German military in the Last Hundred Days. As well, the Canadian navy helped hunting German U-boats and escorting cargo ships, which brought supplies to Britain. Therefore, Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory made World War I change Canada.
The role of women in the homefront made World War I change Canada. During the wartime, many women had started working in many categories of jobs such as secretaries, salesperson, and assembly line workers. In addition, women were buying bonds from the government to finance the war. Many women’s organizations were established to sew socks and pajamas to send to the soldiers. As a result, the role of women in the homefront made World War I changes Canada.
The contributions other than women from the homefront made World War I change Canada. In World War I, Canadian farmers produced four times more food to help feeding the Canadian, British and French soldiers. Canadians also made guns, airplane parts, and ships to supply the war. During the war, about 12,000 boys between the age of 15 and 19 were enrolled and placed on farms to help do the chores and overcome the labour shortage. In addition, many clubs and organizations such as The Dorcas Club and The Thrift Stamp were established to gather money and other necessities to supply the war. Thus, the contributions other than women from the homefront made World War I change Canada.
In conclusion, World War I was the war that changed Canada. It has been proved by examining the above categories: Canadian battles and contributions to the Allies’ victory, the role of women on the homefront, and contributions other than women from the homefront.